The Message About School
Greetings humans of earth, this is a message regarding school. We should
all be happy and grateful that we go to school, because without school you are
nothing. Sure without school you can get a job and get money, but it’s just not
the same. Whereas, you will be doing a job at a fast food restaurant, instead of
a doctor’s office. And it’s ok if you get bad marks, learn from the mistakes
and try harder the next time. Just ask the people who don’t even get an
opportunity to go to school at all. Just always remember to, give it your all.
the ending doesn't make sense. i think you should put it as,"give it your all."
ReplyDeleteI think there should be a comma after whereas
ReplyDeleteyou forgot the space between where and as
ReplyDeleteI think you should compare the amount of money from a fast food restaurant and a better job like a doctor.
ReplyDeleteNice story
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