Tuesday, 22 November 2016


The Unknown Pot




 It was a nice humid afternoon, in the Atlantic Ocean. And a boy named Jake had gone fishing.  Jake gets caught in a massive rainstorm.  And gets lost, but sees land.  He paddles his boat, and reaches land.  Jake takes a tour around the land.  And sees a beautiful garden.  Which has a large red pot with a pattern, in black.  And a face with two oval eyes, a mouth, and a long nose.  And legs sticking out, striped in red, green and blue.  Jake had a lot of questions.  So he decided to take a closer look.  And all he saw was pure black darkness.
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5 comments:

  1. HarryPotter23 November 2016 at 09:02

    I think you should join your second sentence and third sentence together.
    Also, your fifth and sixth, seventh eighth and ninth, and your last two sentences.

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  2. MJ23 November 2016 at 09:18

    I think you should make the fount bigger.

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  3. 100wcbyfread.com24 November 2016 at 16:35

    thank you. for editing/commenting.

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  4. MJ24 November 2016 at 17:21

    I think you should start with something other than once upon a time maybe It was a nice humid afternoon. Just a suggestion.

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  5. 100wcbyfread.com25 November 2016 at 08:34

    thank you MJ

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