The Race
It was Saturday night and Ryan was racing against the unbeaten racer, The Flame. Ryan and The Flame lined up their cars along the starting line. 3, 2, 1. The lights went green, Ryan smashed his foot on the gas pedal and had gained the lead. A tight turn came up, Ryan did a smooth drift around the turn.
Another very tight turn came up but just as the weather changed they tried to turn. It had started raining. Ryan’s car spun out, he had lost the lead. Ryan quickly straightened out his car and activated his special nitro boost. Zoom he had gone right past The Flame and won the race.
I think you should start the second paragraph with a new idea. It starts with the same idea as the first paragraph.
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